Preparation for Essay 2 - Response to Peer Review

Dillon Waugh

Hayes

English 100 – 9:10

2/23/13

Peer Evaluation Response

What was helpful:

-          My peer affirmed that my conclusion was not exactly “conclusive” – that it ends on a vague note. I hadn’t thought it was a very neat ending, myself, and this supports that I should put care into writing a stronger one.

-          According to my peer, I disrupted my own readability by way of sesquipedalian-ism occasionally. I combed through it once already for excessive diction choices and snipped a couple of words.

-          My peer pointed out some formatting oddities and errors as well as failure to use parenthetical citations in text. These are the sorts of things I can absentmindedly forget on my own!

What I question:

-          My peer states that I may offer too little explanation of my evidence, although I’m unsure what else I can say without risking redundancy. Would it be more worth trying than not – do I seem to subconsciously assume that the evidence speaks for itself?

-          Although my evaluator, as mentioned earlier, agreed that my conclusion is unclear, he also commented that it “makes a lasting impression.” What is “right” with it?

-          I’ve been told in the past that I can get quite a bit wordy, and that my sentences can run on or lose their “shape.” My peer expressed no complaints in regards to my sentence craft apart from occasional excessive word choice interrupting my flow. Is my paper sufficiently concise for the most part?